You shut the door with a click not a slam
nor a hesitant half-close
like an eyelid flickering in dream,
recognising time to wake but craving
seconds before opening to pearly distance.
Yes, it was definitive, that click : off and out
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forget me now 
I just love the flickering eyelids, nicely done….and that click, so simple, so devastating, so perfect!
ohhh la lunatique – your responses are always so purely perfect … thank you!
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Your poetry rocks!
xoxox
i’m thrilled see a host of others’ writing that i’m going to enjoy exploring and i’m honoured by your offer …
unlikely that i’ll make it for an entry to this week’s rally but you’ve made me smile, thank you!
excellent.
love your taste on imagery and words.
perfect poem.
🙂
hi Jingle – i’m happy to see you here and just as happy that you think this poem’s worthy of comment – weird how it goes, eh? when i think my effort’s rubbish is when it seems to appeal most to others … lol
illustrates the power of negative space (in more ways than one) … *sigh* …
my dear friend, noxy … so very spot on as always … tho hopefully the Light process of reformulating words helps clean out or at least balance the negativity …. that’s how i see it … though i detest having caused you to sigh like that … actually that’s possibly worse than any of the rest …
I tell everyone I’m not competitive, but…shhhhhh….it’s my little secret….I like to be first 🙂
Oh, and it had merit. Sure did with me.
lol, Annie … sshhhh
not that i know what’s going on anyway … no, really, i don’t …
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Ouch. Though presumedly not literal, I felt the walls shake with the latch. Definitive is the loudest word, yes? And no space, for echo.
wow, that was fast Annie lol
yes, you got it .. no space for echo … only the door is non-literal but i still heard the click, darn it!
thanks for reading this *ouch … it has minimal poetic merit but i needed to splatter the moment *grin