in the claws of silence
silver breath
holds
still
waits for a sign
that passage has been granted
that the storm will not kill
though leaves endure
quick bite and split of pure indifference
in the claws of silence
silver breath
holds
still
waits for a sign
that passage has been granted
that the storm will not kill
though leaves endure
quick bite and split of pure indifference
very talented. hope you post more. i like that the storm will not kill.
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although it’s short i think the poem may have said too much, become too obvious despite the metaphor behind it … not one of my best but i’m glad you enjoyed it .. thank you!
I love the first line.
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*heh … yeah, it’s not a very strong poem, didn’t really do or go where i wished and i haven’t really felt like working on it … butterfly mind at the moment *grin .. still, i’m happy that you enjoyed the first line … maybe i should have left it at that?? lol